Concept Ideas Feedback

Below is the feedback I received about my opening film ideas from the class:

When presenting my idea I got very helpful feedback on how I can develop and move forward with my ideas and I will note down what exactly that feedback was and what I will be doing to enhance my ideas:

• The feedback I got for Idea 2 - the Horror plot was that the setting/time I had chosen was essentially too generic and that it could be placed in the future for a unique and unusual setting. What I would do to move forward with this feedback would be to, as it was mentioned, place the story in the far future with the blind man be a rich old man as well and the women coming and attacking him be a spy like figure(trained assassin getting her revenge) this could be done is very interesting way with unusual lighting/makeup/setting, all in all it would open up a lot of room for creativity. I would change parts of the plot so it fits the setting better and the story provides a more interesting point of view. One part of the feedback was that the use of the man being partially blind was a good method as you wouldn’t be able to see the threat so I would keep this part.

• The feedback I got for Idea 3 - the drama/romance was that the connotation of colour was useful and a good idea but that I should consider the colour more as if I was to present a more dangerous story I would use red. Another note I got was that the connotation of what was going on in the car might not be appropriate so a way I would change this is by having no cuts when it shows them smoking so that there is no confusion when it comes to what happened in the car or for another idea to get around this I would put another person is the car between the two people that just gets ignored. While the connotation of colour is important I wouldn’t want to change the lighting to red unless I changed the plot which was another note as it was said that it would be interesting to put a horror turn on it and show the boy seeing their relationship as beautiful and romantic but in reality it is obsessive and that is the truth that is slowly revealed, this is an interesting plot that I would definitely want to explore but I am also torn with the original idea as they are such different plot and I need to flesh both out a bit more for sure.